考研英語作文考場范文批改及點(diǎn)評(14)

(文章直接描述圖畫內(nèi)容，不妥，可加一句圖畫類作文的開頭常用句，如As is vividly depicted in the picture,等)The black man, with a happy and delighted face(改為with a happiness of facial expression), is spending spring festival with a Chinese family. Conspicuously, it is a (改為an)encouraging scene relate to culture integration between China and west(可改為the west countries), which is a(改為an) excellent offspring of new century.Several factor(改為factors，several意為“幾個”，其后名詞應(yīng)用復(fù)數(shù)形式) weight heavily for this emerging trend illustrate(改為illustrated) in the picture, yet, two kernels suspended on the top of the list which should never be overlooked. To begin with, the Chinese economy has witnessed its unprecedented lever(改為level,unprecedented level表示“前所未有的水平") of growth in past 30 years, which give an powerful impetus to the publicity of Chinese civilization. What’s more, Chinese culture, though through perpetual wars and turbulence, preserve its vitality and glamour(改為its vitality and glamour are preserved), (加and its)assets appreciated by most foreigners. There are encouraging parallels today, as many westerners in one wave after another making their trip(改為trips) to China to get panorama of Chinese heritage.From my perspective, various measures should be made to foster this integration. Firstly, suitable atmosphere must be created, where our culture and its counterparts can co-exist in harmonious.,(注意標(biāo)點(diǎn)的正確使用)by us. Secondly, the authorities ought to lunch various publicity campaigns to make Chinese culture known to(加the) world. The cultural thrive has loomed, and the economic prosperity will not be far away.

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