GRE寫作官方題庫高頻ARGUMENT題目滿分范文分享：planning for retirement

　　The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement:

　　"Because of its spectacular natural beauty and consistent climate, Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire. As a bonus, housing costs in Clearview have fallen significantly during the past year, and real estate taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Nevertheless, Clearview's mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. Retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average."

　　滿分范文賞析

　　The argument presented in this article indicates that Clearview should be the top choice for retirees. Clearview's consistent climate and natural beauty, it's falling housing costs, comparatively low property taxes, the mayor's promises for continued improvement to services and excellent health care are all cited as reasons. While Clearview seems like the perfect choice, the argument itself is less than persuasive. Let’s explore.

　　【此段結(jié)構(gòu)】

　　本段采用了標準的Argument開頭段結(jié)構(gòu)，即：C – E - F的開頭結(jié)構(gòu)，首句概括原文的C(Conclusion)。接下來的一句話概括了原文為了支持他的結(jié)論所引用的E(Evidence)。最后尾句中給出開頭段到正文段的過渡句，指出原文在邏輯上存在F(Flaw)。

　　【此段功能】

　　本段作為Argument開頭段，具體功能就在發(fā)起攻擊。首先，概括原文的結(jié)論：Clearview(簡稱C)是退休者最好的選擇。接下來分別列舉了原文為了支持這個結(jié)論引用的證據(jù)：Clearview的consistent climate and natural beauty，下降的房價，相對低的property taxes以及市長關(guān)于提到health care的承諾。引用的論據(jù)的歸納用于鋪墊出正文段的具體攻擊。最后點出原文存在邏輯錯誤，引出后面的分析。

　　For starters, lets consider consistent climate and natural beauty as a reason for Clearview to take the top spot. These factors are probably some but not all retirees. For many it is probably more important to live near relatives or even to enjoy changing seasons.

　　【此段結(jié)構(gòu)】

　　本段采用了標準的Argument正文段結(jié)構(gòu)，即：概括第一個邏輯錯誤的錯誤類型和原文犯錯位置，接下來給出合理的理由和他因來反駁原文。

　　【此段功能】

　　本段作為正文第二段，攻擊文章犯的主要邏輯錯誤：因果類錯誤。作者認為退休者未必把意氣候和自然風(fēng)光當(dāng)成top choice。作者提出退休者可能更加關(guān)注的其他事物來駁斥原文，例如，close to relatives, enjoy changing season.

　　Also, Clearview's declining housing costs do not necessarily make Clearview the best place to retire for two reasons: despite the decline, Clearview's housing costs might be comparably high nation wide and for wealthier retirees housing costs are not likely to be a factor in choosing a place to retire. Thus the mere fact that housing costs have been in decline shouldn’t send people rushing to retire in Clearview.

　　【此段功能】

　　本段作為正文第三段，攻擊文章犯的主要邏輯錯誤：錯誤因果。作者認為property taxes 不一定是退休者要考慮養(yǎng)老的首要因素。作者提出，退休者一般有其他選擇而且 well-off financially，因此就property taxes而把C地當(dāng)成養(yǎng)老的首要選擇是不正確的。

　　Yet another problem with the argument involves the mayor's promises. In light of Clearview's low property-tax rates, one should wonder if the mayor would be able to follow through. Absent any explanation of how the city can spend more money in the areas cited without raising property taxes, one simply cannot accept the editorial's recommendation.

　　【此段結(jié)構(gòu)】

　　本段采用了標準的Argument結(jié)尾段結(jié)構(gòu)，即：C – S的結(jié)尾結(jié)構(gòu)，首先再次重申原文的站不住腳的Conclusion，接下來給出給合理建議Suggestion。

　　【此段功能】

　　本段作為Argument結(jié)尾段，具體功能就總結(jié)歸納+建議措施，首先再次重申：原文的論斷是沒有說服力的。接下來作者給出幾條建議：一是通過引用調(diào)查來說明retirees關(guān)注consistent climate and natural beauty，declining house rate等因素;二是具體說明改善health care的政策會落實;最后說明C地區(qū)平均醫(yī)生比例高于其他地方。這幾條建議含蓄的隱射前面的錯誤，前后呼應(yīng)，文章有力結(jié)尾，渾然一體。