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話題:Some people believe that older generation’s traditional ideas are not the right way to live, think and behave in modern society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?(2008/01/19)
Past ideas are precious treasures of human beings. Although not every traditional idea can be used in modern community, many of them still have their reference value for the development of our society. In other words, if we follow these ideas in the properly on the basis of current situation, they still could pave the right way for us to think and live.
重點(diǎn)看past,community,還有pave the right way。較準(zhǔn)確的表達(dá)可以是traditional, society, be a good guidance。
還有:It is the heritage of traditional opinions that enables us to be frugal for living materials, natural and social resources. 這句話的說理用上了heritage, enable,其實(shí)本身都沒有問題,但是放在這,顯得突兀。“傳統(tǒng)觀點(diǎn)”的遺產(chǎn),使我們能夠變得節(jié)約。一部分原因是作者把traditional ideas換成了traditional opinions,這其實(shí)不是無縫的同義替換。較好的表達(dá)可以是:Traditional ideas teach us to be frugal and always save for the future.
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在同義詞替換和照搬原詞間,有時(shí)后者更好。