2013年6月英語(yǔ)四級(jí)作文范文高分版點(diǎn)評(píng)（滬江網(wǎng)校版）

作文高分版點(diǎn)評(píng)

The Big is the Little

Nothing can be done except little by little, the French poet Baudelaire Charles once said. Most people, however, often ignore such a truth. So does the little boy shown in the picture. He expresses his worries to his father about disposing of nuclear waste, but is told that he can achieve nothing if he doesn’t empty the dustbin first.

Every single little thing you can do today matters. The truth has been tested for ages, and thousands of great people have set good examples for us. For instance, Leonardo da Vinci, the world-renowned master in painting, starts his career with repeated egg-drawing. Lu Xun, the great man of letters, reminded himself to get up early by inscribing the character “morning” on his desk.

As university students, in my opinion, we should aim high, but at the same time, we shall never measure a task by its size. All in all, only those who have the patience to do simple things perfectly will acquire the skill to do difficult things easily.

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本次四級(jí)作文為看圖作文，探討的話題是“一屋不掃，何以掃天下”。這個(gè)話題較為常見(jiàn)，一般考生對(duì)此都比較熟悉，所以對(duì)考生來(lái)說(shuō)難度不大。一篇好的四級(jí)作文，要注意兩點(diǎn)：一，要緊扣題目要求;二，要在評(píng)論的基礎(chǔ)上亮出自己的觀點(diǎn)。

范文開頭第一句就開門見(jiàn)山，引用名言，亮出觀點(diǎn)，簡(jiǎn)短而有力。緊接著又用圖片中所給的故事，作為論據(jù)支撐。這樣以來(lái)，既避免了直接敘述故事帶來(lái)的突兀感，又使故事更好的支持論點(diǎn)。

第二段作者進(jìn)一步分析深入論證自己觀點(diǎn)。通過(guò)中外兩個(gè)“從小事做起的”偉人的例子做論證，使論點(diǎn)更為飽滿，更具說(shuō)服力。

第三段作者從自身出發(fā)，指出大學(xué)生對(duì)“一屋不掃”應(yīng)該具備積極的態(tài)度。文章最后，以名言作結(jié)，切中主題，鏗鏘有力。