專(zhuān)四應(yīng)試技巧（寫(xiě)作篇3：句子的簡(jiǎn)練）

　　專(zhuān)四應(yīng)試技巧(寫(xiě)作篇3：句子的簡(jiǎn)練)

　　句子的簡(jiǎn)練：累贅是寫(xiě)作常見(jiàn)的弊病之一。寫(xiě)作時(shí)應(yīng)力求言簡(jiǎn)意賅，短小精悍。也就是說(shuō)，在能說(shuō)“走，天竺!”的時(shí)候千萬(wàn)不要說(shuō)“你挑著擔(dān)我騎著馬迎來(lái)日出送走晚霞地去西天也就是天竺現(xiàn)在叫印度的地方如來(lái)佛祖那里取經(jīng)到東土大唐來(lái)。”(咦?為什么大家都在吐?)眾人：

　　那個(gè)……總之，能簡(jiǎn)潔就簡(jiǎn)潔便是了。下面來(lái)看幾句例句。

　　繁瑣 My little bother always disappears from view when it is time for dinner.

　　簡(jiǎn)潔 My little bother always disappears when it is time for dinner.

　　繁瑣 The point I am trying to make is that practice makes perfect.

　　簡(jiǎn)潔 I believe that practice makes perfect.

　　繁瑣 I am writing to call your attention to the fact that…

　　簡(jiǎn)潔 I am writing to remind you that…

　　練習(xí)：

　　下列句子中都很繁瑣，請(qǐng)修改成簡(jiǎn)潔句。

　　1)There are several things which are interesting here.

　　2)It is encouraging and inspiring to note that sales which are reported right now have increased this month.

　　3)Another factor that adds to the persuasive power of this speech is the vivid example is gives.

　　參考答案：

　　1)There are several things which are interesting here.

　　Several things are interesting here.

　　2)It is encouraging and inspiring to note that sales which are reported right now have increased this month.

　　Sales have increased this month; the figures are encouraging.(特別說(shuō)明一下，這句句子是商務(wù)英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作的范疇，一般不用形式主語(yǔ)，不用從句，所以這里不要用it is + aj.句型。)

　　3)Another factor that adds to the persuasive power of this speech is the vivid example is gives.

　　The vivid example also makes the speech mor persuasive.